CUWAM: Write on Wednesday ‘ My Heart Says….’

The Write on Wednesday Spark: Agent Chin- Wag

Pay attention to the conversations around you: at the dinner table, in the supermarket, while DVD Returning, wherever. You are looking for one line, one tiny sentence of dialogue. You may find your words lurking in a D&M or perhaps you will choose a phrase from everyday chatter. Write down your line. Use it to inspire your Write on Wednesday post. Keep your post on the short side: up to 500 words OR a 5 minute stream of consciousness exercise. Link your finished piece to the list and begin popping by the other links. Oh and enjoy.

I was lucky enough to be privy to a conversation that included the line : ‘ My heart says’…a line I termed a real Romeo and Juliette balcony moment…Here goes…


‘My heart says’

Joe sat up on his unmade bed. It was 5.16pm and she would have started her evening shift at the corner store.

He got ready to move, to stand up, place two feet on the ground, walk toward his bedroom door, open it, emerge from his self imposed day of exile and enter the big bad world.

Caitlin had a hold on him. He could think of nothing else…and with the Year 10 formal looming, he wanted her to be his date.

Before his feet made contact with the floor, which was covered in dirty clothes, empty chip packets and a random selection of his comic books, Joe had dived back under the cover….this crush was crippling him.

‘My heart says go down the road and ask her out’ he mouthed into the pillow, whilst hiding beneath bed sheets.

‘But my head says NO, don’t be so silly, she doesn’t even know my name’

Over and over he played out the impending corner store rendezvous ….He felt sick to the stomach, racked with nerves, hot, then cold, everything all at once.

To make matters worse, the early 1990’s Roxette smash hit, ‘Listen to your heart’ was stuck in his head…it had been for days.

Poking his head out from the covers Joes broke into song‘ Listen to your heart, when it’s calling for you. Listen to your heart, there is nothing else you can do’

With a jolt, he threw the bedsheets to one side and stood upright. He rummaged around the floor, found his running shoes, laciing them up in record speed.

Roxette was right, oh so right, there was nothing else he could do, but put his pride on the line and ask the girl out. Joe swung open his bedroom, ran past his parents sitting in the living room, and headed toward the front door.

‘Matters of the heart Mum and Dad, be back soon’



12 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. MissieK
    Jan 25, 2012 @ 10:14:11

    Great piece. You’ve captured the pain of young love very well.


  2. sjp
    Jan 25, 2012 @ 11:04:45

    Good portrayal of such indecisiveness.


  3. Zanre5
    Jan 25, 2012 @ 12:24:46

    So very sweet!


  4. Daphne
    Jan 26, 2012 @ 05:16:46

    I love that he did it. He was going after what his heart told him was true. Love in its simplist form. Good read.


  5. Sam
    Jan 27, 2012 @ 02:31:55

    I love how this piece is so easy to relate to. Really great!


  6. Donna @ NappyDaze
    Jan 27, 2012 @ 05:31:15

    Now I have Roxette’s song stuck in my head 🙂 very apt though, as I think we all went though those agonising teen situations.

    Lovely story, hope he got the girl!


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