Five Sentence Fiction: Victory

Word prompt: Victory

He hung up the phone…every limb in his body was shaking, sweat beads had formed on his brow, heart beating so fast he thought it might burst through his chest.

The 5 phone calls, 3 text messages and numerous facebook chats had paid off.

She had said yes.

Being 16 was one tough gig…but going to the school disco solo was another story.

He had a date for Friday night, she had said yes, and in an instant, that one word had set right all that was once wrong in the world.

8 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. lisashambrook
    Aug 05, 2012 @ 22:35:56

    You got that just right! The beating heart and angst of young love!


  2. Sandra Stephen Boyle
    Aug 06, 2012 @ 03:32:21

    Enjoyed the short Victory story


  3. Sandra
    Aug 06, 2012 @ 16:52:26

    Truly victorious – or so it would seem at that age. Nicely done.


  4. ahblack57
    Aug 07, 2012 @ 12:12:52

    ahhh… young love….


  5. Lillie McFerrin
    Aug 09, 2012 @ 16:52:54

    Oh, you captured the turmoil and triumph of being sixteen so well. Awesome!!!


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