Five Sentence Fiction : Devotion

Word Prompt: Devotion

A dear friend recently recommended I take time to watch the French film‘ Goodbye, First Love’

Of the film, I could not speak highly enough….so inspired by the movie and its achingly beautiful depiction of  first love, I wrote a short piece of fiction.

She loved him, loved him with her heart, loved him is much it hurt.

The love she felt consumed her, made her feel lost in thoughts of only him…it also made her angry, tired and irritable.

‘It’s the cross you have to bear ’ her Mother had said to her one day when she had confided that the love they shared was at times heavy,  a burden.

Yet whenever she felt overwhelmed by love, her adoration and devotion to him alone, she knew to think back to their first kiss.

In had taken place in  her Father’s rose garden, the flowers perfume had been intoxicating, and when they locked lips it was as if the world finally made sense….that first kiss had been a gift, it served as a reminder when her  heart ever had doubts, that the love she had found was one of  life’s true certainties.

3 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Steve
    Dec 17, 2012 @ 09:12:50

    Impressive compressed writing with excellent depth of meaning


  2. Claire
    Dec 18, 2012 @ 17:58:41

    Wonderful writing! I loved the use of the bolded phrases, and the emotion in this was beautiful!


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