Five Sentence Fiction- Flight

It had hurt, really hurt, to think he would leave her.

All the talk of throwing caution to the wind, boarding an international flight, to well, anywhere, was so out of character, such a far-fetched idea that she had not taken any of it seriously.

She has dismissed it all as ‘hot air’, a phase that would pass, a small hiccup of discontent that would eventually resolve itself and life with her true love would return to normal.

What a fool she had been, self-absorbed and distant, her coping mechanism of withholding her true feelings about the matter backfiring….he had meant every word.

Normal was now a world of solitude….breakfast, lunch and dinner alone, the occasional post-card from somewhere exotic, from a person she considered a total stranger.

11 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. McGuffy Ann
    Jul 07, 2013 @ 12:20:33

    Well written. I could feel this.


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  3. Barbara @
    Jul 07, 2013 @ 21:58:23

    Very painful, intense piece. I can feel this too. Very nicely done.


  4. ahblack57
    Jul 08, 2013 @ 14:39:41

    I feel for both really because it sounds like he was sending all the signals just begging her to ask him not to go and she wasn’t reading them. Sounds like a lose-lose situation. Nice job!


    • Catch Up With A Mate
      Jul 08, 2013 @ 23:31:37

      Thanks for stopping by…Not sure how I channelled this story, it is not my reality at all….the joy of writing I guess, sometimes you hit the right note, the words enabling the reader to really feel for the characters in your story.


  5. K R Smith
    Jul 08, 2013 @ 16:34:48

    Nicely done, but sad!


  6. injaynesworld
    Jul 08, 2013 @ 21:49:21

    Bitter. Party of one…

    You’ve captured this couple’s disconnect beautifully. When someone tells you they’re leaving, they generally mean it.


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